I want your input into this song. It can be heard at my My Space page.

starstraf asked me about this when I first posted a link to the song. It's a song about a little town dying out slowly and my mourning of this. In it there is a mention of Walmart making it impossible for the town to ever thrive again. I am worried that this will unbalance the song. The song is not about Walmart, since it had nothing to do with the demise of the town, but the reaction to the verse has been mixed. Below the cut I have two versions of the lyrics, the original, and a rewrite with the Walmart verse cut out. What do you think?

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( The Lyrics )

Ghosts is up on my MySpace page now ...

I will have the new song up on my myspace page in a couple of hours. I am going to record the other song for the festival here in just a bit, but it's such a performance piece for such a specific instance that I might not put it up anywhere, not that I don't want anyone to hear it, just that I don't think it will work well as a recording.

I'm still having some problems burning off to the computer, but I think that is fixable. I can only get one channel, not stereo. It's the cord I am using (get a new cord, I'll bring another one in tomorrow), the output of the mixer (mix out of the headphone jack for now, need a new stereo to stereo mini cord) or it's the jack into the computer (pretty sure that it is not, the stuff I did at home this morning came out in stereo)

The hiss seems to be less too ... so things are going better

It may be the 2nd best serious song I have written (after Hides)

I'm more and more pleased with this ... It'll get it's con debut at Demicon